School does not prepare students for the world of work

1.

School does not prepare students for the world of work РКЗ 2 бала
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There is a growing opinion that school does not get
children ready for the (their) working life. Some
people, however, argue that it is not so.
School does not make children be ready
Students get ready / are ready
Введение +

2.

Мнение автора +
I personally believe that school plays a significant role in preparing
students for the professional world +. Firstly, that is the place where
students get access to various sources of knowledge, broaden their
horizon and mindset which they will need for career-making +.
Secondly, logical and critical skills gained at school will be essential
for young people at work if they want to overcome challenges and
think independently (+) Finally, school is a key factor in children’s
socializing, it enhances their soft skills like leadership, networking
and conflict resolution(+). Each of these talents (какие именно
таланты перечислены выше? Только навыки ) are indispensable
in today’s job market (логика these )(-) .
Professional career/professional life
To broaden mindset такого сочетания скорее всего не
встречается
The key factor

3.

Мнение оппонента + However, some people disagree and claim that
students do not get prepared for the real world of work
because of the school rules (+). They believe that at
school children are forced to obey teachers and are
not allowed to have a different opinion (-) . As a
result,(school) graduates lack confidence and are not
ready to make their own decisions это можно
написать и о периоде в школе – нет связи с
работой) .
Как школьные правила мешают в будущем в
работе?
Аргументы неточные – можно отнести к проблеме в
школе

4.

Опровержение +
I am afraid I cannot agree with this idea (какую
именно идею вы представлена в этом параграфе)
In my opinion, teaching to follow the rules does not
mean teaching blind obedience, but to show respect
to others, so it cannot hinder students’ development.
Желательно в каждом параграфе показать для
работы (the world of work)

5.

Заключение+
In conclusion, I think that school is the perfect place
to get students well-equipped for the world of work
because of the knowledge and a great number of vital
skills it gives.